100WCGU week #58 – The apple

This week’s 100WCGU was to write a short story including the prompt …as the apple fell… making the story 104 words in total. Here’s my entry:

The apple
Lauren walked slowly along the deserted corridor, stopping to give the apple a polish. It was a bit silly really, ‘an apple for the teacher,’ but she thought he would appreciate the joke. She stopped just outside the room when she heard a familiar giggle. ‘Oh David, no… What about Lauren?’
‘What about her? She’s a nice girl, but Jemma… She’s a girl. It’s just a crush, she’ll grow out of it. I will keep tutoring her though, she needs all the help she can get if she’s…’
‘Oh, Lauren…’
As the apple fell from Lauren’s hand, all the colour drained from her face.

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11 responses to “100WCGU week #58 – The apple

  1. Poor Lauren. I think this would have been even better if I’d realised from the start that there was some sort of relationship between Lauren and David. I thought it was a crush the teacher didn’t even know about.

  2. So sad for Lauren. Wonderfully written, I enjoyed it and would love to know more about these characters 🙂

  3. Great piece – I love that you have included no just a snapshot of a moment, but so many hints about back story in so few words.

  4. A crush can be an emotional ride for someone so young and shattering when realisation of how the crush is seen. Crushes on teachers happen. This was a good read. 🙂

  5. I liked the apple usage in this case, and like Ross, we all suffer crushes, don’t we. Nice little read,,, enjoyed it. Randy

  6. Sounds like the cyanide in the apple pips might come in useful. Nice story, part of something bigger!

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