100 WCGU #57 – A routine evening

This week’s 100WCGU was to write a short story including the prompt …returning to the routine… making the story 104 words in total. Here’s my entry:

A routine evening
Samara had walked the perimeter of the room twice and turned the light on and off five times when Sayed walked in. He stood against the doorframe, a sly smile threatening to break his poker face. ‘Whatcha doin’ Sam?’ He used a sing-song voice, the kind one might use to talk to a small child. Frozen to the spot, Samara looked at her feet. ‘You know what I’m doing,’ she whispered. Sayed laughed ‘You’re weird,’ he threw at her as he left the room. Returning to the routine, Samara let a tear escape and once again started to walk the perimeter of her room.

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13 responses to “100 WCGU #57 – A routine evening

  1. Sam, I take it, is a little OCD, huh?

  2. Well written. OCD can be very life limiting. Few understand the urge an OCD sufferer has to repeat routines regardless of what logic is saying to them.

  3. Hmm, I wanted to know what she was doing. Great attention grabber!

  4. This is a great piece of writing that has so much in the 100 words. All that passion from Samara & the tension of the bully Sayed. Super writing. Thank you so much for the mention for 100WC too!

  5. Very well told. I don’t see Sayed as a bully, though. Just (unfortunately) like the rest of us who label “weird” what we don’t understand.

  6. Amanda Christie

    Captures the desperation of Samara and the seemingly lack of compassion on Sayed’s part so succinctly. Makes me want to know what is going to happen to them as a couple….

    • Thanks Amanda. When I first wrote this I left it open as to whether Sayed and Samara where a couple or brother and sister so it’s interesting to see how people interpret their relationship…I would like to develop them more so they may pop up again in future!

  7. Oh, this is so sad. What an unfeeling man!

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